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    转火色诗歌一首

    日月(组曲)
    文/火色
    一 日
       
    麦子还没有割完
    农夫就走了
    剩下的麦子疯长
    一夜之间
    就穿破了天空
    孩子站在田梗边仰望
    天上全部是麦子
    金黄金黄的
    二 月
    我在那把藤椅上做过好多梦
    梦把椅子堆得满满的,
    妈妈一晃,就会掉下来几颗
    然后再也找不到
    我一直不记得自己究竟掉了多少颗
    只知道满天上都是
    我恨透了那把破烂的藤椅
    直到有一天
    所有的星星,从眼眶边涌出
    才发现自己其实,什么也没有失去

    三 日月
    晚祷声起的时候
    太阳就老了
    人们经常会忽视青春的面孔
    就像遗忘一首歌曲的名字
    其实“月”,只不过是“日”
    长了两根胡须
     
    附:组曲一献给海子。
    (此诗是天涯诗会2005年3月“三月”同题征文参赛作品,拙作有幸忝列于优秀之中)

    “一把”胡须改成“两根”胡须会不会更符合逻辑?不好意思,擅自改动。
    “一把”胡须显的你不是年轻而是成熟了。“两根”胡须则显的你还年轻正在转变。你觉得呢?

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    小邪 杨wrote:
    恭喜啊
    Jan. 16

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